I’m jumping into this writing job with the intention of being a full time writer one day. So I wanted to go back and revise some of the novels I wrote years ago. Those first ones that I wrote before I knew more about the craft. The three historical novels won’t need much fixed in the way of the research. Not much has changed in the middle ages since the last time I researched the middle ages.
I was going through a paranormal suspense that I wanted to finish eventually. It’s a stand alone book so it will be on a back burner until some of my series are well under way. But my writing group was having a critique meeting and the theme was ghosts. This was the only thing I had available that the group hadn’t seen yet so I did a quick read through of the chapter and sent it off.
The story is set in Nova Scotia, Canada. Can you tell what’s wrong with the passage below?
I’m not sure about other places but here there is no smoking in bars and restaurants anymore. Those once smoke filled places are now free of the haze drifting into the air from everyone puffing away on cigarettes. At the time I wrote that passage I was attempting to show details about the character instead of telling. The scene worked great back in 2000 when I wrote it not so much now. Earlier on in the chapter I also had him smoking in his rental car and flicking ashes in the ashtray. I haven’t rented a car in ages but I don’t think new cars even come with ashtrays anymore.
Thankfully I’d only written chapter one. Once I fix those details that just don’t work now I will eventually finish the book. I had thought about the story every once in a while over the years. There are so many other stories that need my attention but I will finish this ghost story. So many stories to write, so little time.
Have you ever had to revise your story because details just didn’t work anymore? Have you read stories that were written years ago where the details weren’t right now?
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A road trip without a plan sounded like a good idea when Lena and her friends hit the road. After hours of driving in the heat in a cramped car they’re all ready for something to eat and a good night’s rest.
Reflections Inn looks perfect for the group of friends. A little run down, it hides a supernatural horror. A curse that replaces people with their repressed alter egos forces the friends to fight for their lives. Duplicates who lack restraint, crave gratification emerge from the mirrors. Too late they realize they didn’t know each other as well as they thought.
One by one, Lena’s friends learn the truth about their repressed emotions, their suppressed violent urges.
What doesn’t kill them can only make them stronger.
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